What do you think of this college application essay? Tips are badly wanted?

You've got a typo in the second sentence, a grammatical error in the last paragraph, and an awkward sentence that begins with the word, "Reflecting." While I understand what you're saying, I think your essay is too generalized and maybe a little trite. The phrase "I delight in personal education advancement" is too stuffy and pompous. What subjects get your imagination going? Military history? Politics? Art? Religion? Baseball? Ayurvedic medicine? Perhaps if you included something more personal than your fondness for Newsweek, it would give the college application people a better sense of your personality and interests.